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    Author: saartha
    ASL Info:    27/F/US
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 230/385/134
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    The sound of light
    hitting rough against the hillside.

    I am fond of this town,
    spinning out
    in a loom of rain and sun,
    all its shining green threads

    the way one is fond
    of a mountain
    on Mars.

    That strange, sideways love,
    found in the word ‘someday’
    and in ‘used to.’

    The red dust and the trumpet of light, and there,
    there, suddenly there
    the motes of humanity.




    Submitted on 2016-11-11 11:45:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      the crackle of rays
    as they stroke the treetops
    and shatter the stars
    that melt like rain

    slithering down
    like a mirrored reflection
    of a glacial collapse
    before a brilliant day

    Just my thoughts on yours.
    | Posted on 2016-11-11 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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