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    dots Submission Name: Salvation dots
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    Author: Ramneet
    ASL Info:    33/F/Boston
    Elite Ratio:    2.98 - 255/101/47
    Words: 44
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Salvation

    Salvation is freedom from negativity and vices.
    Salvation is unconditional love.
    Salvation is introspection.
    Salvation is being nonjudgmental.
    Salvation is the stability of the mind.
    Salvation is the positivity of the mind.
    Salvation is the exalted state of the mind.




    Submitted on 2016-11-14 23:21:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Salvation of ones soul is the apex of ones existence. What you describe has salvation is true. You demonstrate the many facets that are engaged when one is truly free. Well done!

    as for the work itself, I would really love to have seen some metaphors and images. Show us what you mean by salvation rather than tell us. Perhaps you can draw the metaphor of salvation as freedom by liking it to a bird set free from its cage, or a shooting star escaping from the boundaries of its axis. Now, these aren't great suggestions, but I simply use them to illustrate how you can show rather than tell us what salvation looks like.

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    | Posted on 2016-11-21 00:00:00 | by rev.jpfadeproof | [ Reply to This ]


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