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    dots Submission Name: Honey I Could Go On and Ondots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 228
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsHoney I Could Go On and Ondots
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    You have overheard his harsh tones
    That I always take with ease
    His hardness and his unbending posture mislead you to believe
    I am living under some sort of opression
    I must "put up with him" another day
    Poor thing, and she doesn't deserve that are the things I hear you say
    Thank you for your concern
    Your well wishing and esteem
    But the man I choose to be with is soft enough for me
    With that absolute tone you overhear
    He defends me to the masses
    He works his back to the bone every day
    So he can provide this house we live in
    He is a King to his someday to be queen daughter
    Best friend to the first of his two sons
    And with another on the way
    He went back to work another job
    Even though I may complain
    And though it is quite obvious you don't see
    This man who father to my children
    Is soft enough for me
    For in every area he is without compromise
    I can rest safely
    He has never let us down
    Or ever been unfaithful
    Yes he is the reason I lead such a privileged life
    The reason I get to watch my kids grow up
    And now matter what you think you've seen
    He is good, no better, the best, man enough for me




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      i can relate to this piece on the other end. I can at times be very demanding of the gal I love best. I'm often obsessive and can be explosive, but like your man, I'm never cruel or hurtful. For some of us its hard to keep ourselves quite with the ones we love. For me, its a fear that what they do or say will hurt them. So I tend to come on too strong. They, like you, understand and look at the heart and my character. That's al one can do. at the end of the day its just you and your husband. and thats all that matters.

    well done!
    JP
    | Posted on 2016-11-21 00:00:00 | by rev.jpfadeproof | [ Reply to This ]


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