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    dots Submission Name: All for you, My Lovedots
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    Author: rev.jpfadeproof
    ASL Info:    27/m/nyc
    Elite Ratio:    6.16 - 366/357/146
    Words: 48
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsAll for you, My Lovedots
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    Evening settles- a
    Kimono of magenta Skies
    Slipping past the turquoise stars


    Each breathe
    The lullaby of a thousand cherubim
    Each nuance rising like the dandelion

    All for you, my love
    All for
                        Y
                             .o
                                  u

    DiCicco Cosentino




    Submitted on 2016-11-18 00:17:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Evening settles- a
    Kimono of magenta Skies
    Slipping (past) the turquoise stars


    Each breathe
    (The) lullaby of (a) thousand cherubim
    Each nuance rising like the dandelion

    All for you, my love
    All for
    Y
    .o
    u


    Just a few little things that I noticed in the text. This feels as if it was hurriedly written, like a sketch. I prefer the first part to the second probably because I can't quite make the connection between a cherub and a dandelion.
    | Posted on 2016-11-18 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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