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    dots Submission Name: Absurd dots
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    Author: rev.jpfadeproof
    ASL Info:    27/m/nyc
    Elite Ratio:    6.16 - 366/357/146
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       a simple thought of her before bed


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    dotsAbsurd dots
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    How absurd of me to think that i could handle you -

    You
              who
                        are
                                  the

    purple
                                                                                                   lightning

                   that splits eve                              ning

                                                 like
                                                           the
                                                                     red
                                                                               sea

                                                                          you
                                                                who
                                                      calls
                                                 the
                                       stars

    by

    name and they respond in your eyes-

    DICICCO COSENTINO




    Submitted on 2016-11-21 21:51:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I love the shape of this and the image of the purple lightning splitting the evening sky. I like that the speaker is upset that he thought he could "handle" this woman, too. There are few of us who are easily "handled". At least in my small circle . . . It is much like trying to handle fire . . . or in this case, lightning.

    Well done.
    | Posted on 2017-02-20 00:00:00 | by JanePlane | [ Reply to This ]


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