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    dots Submission Name: Poet's Lament dots
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    Author: rev.jpfadeproof
    ASL Info:    27/m/nyc
    Elite Ratio:    6.19 - 366/354/146
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsPoet's Lament dots
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    i wonder if it’s all worth it-

                        wasted words falling

                                                                from my fingers like ancient empires

    the struggle of a cynosure, the light of Jupiter waning between                    us

    ---

    i want to wisp you up particle       by      particle and hide you in the fold of my mouth
                             from the thrashing storm and spit you out in revelations               that

    shall seed the scorched plains with your cells
                                                                               x
                                                                          i
                                                                     n
    ---                                                       e
                                                           o
                                                      h
    you will rise as the               p
                                                      and cascade the fields in iridescence                    but i

    ---

    can barely make out the light of Jupiter anymore

                                                           it falls silent, into the hallow of your collarbone

    in insipid breathes that linger on the lips before being dissolved as a wing

    ---

                                  and so i weep tonight

    for the dimming of light

    that fell over our shoulders and was lost to the wind

    dicicco cosentino





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      What, in particular, are you lamenting? The overwhelming cascade of words that sometime struggle to express meaning? Or the fact that there are so many words, yet the one that would perfectly describes your condition doesn't seem to exist? I believe that the Phoenix rises when our lives find purpose and we touch the infinite. Otherwise our words become empty rituals that exist as exercises in phonetics and grammar. Words only become insipid when they become boring.

    At least that's my babble.
    | Posted on 2017-01-27 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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