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    dots Submission Name: Sea Dreamdots
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    Author: rev.jpfadeproof
    ASL Info:    27/m/nyc
    Elite Ratio:    6.14 - 366/359/149
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSea Dreamdots
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    in his dreams she was Picasso
                                                      which painted a smile on his face with her own

    she skipped on the sea
                                                                                              and
                                       scribbled his name in the sand

    she stood before him,
                                       pearlescent arms opened like the Pietà,                         “come”

    she whispered, “shall we explore the


                                                                          depths?”

    he reached for her like the tides      r      e      a      c      h          for the                    shore

    “yes” he said,

                             “let us kiss beneath the foamy waves and rise to meet the moon”

    dicicco cosentino©







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