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    Author: Chelebel
    Elite Ratio:    1.97 - 47/163/169
    Words: 49
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    Wish stars
    bring light
    to my eyes
    while meteorites
    flash by.


    Crashing
    effortlessly
    into your arms;
    I gravitated into your orbit,
    opened up to the atmospheric
    air, and took in a deep breath of you.






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