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    Author: Chelebel
    Elite Ratio:    1.84 - 44/148/164
    Words: 50
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Wish stars
    bring light
    to my eyes
    while meteorites
    flash by.


    Crashing
    effortlessly
    into your arms,
    I gravitated into your orbit,
    opened up to the atmospheric
    air and took in a deep breath of you.






    Submitted on 2016-11-24 00:54:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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