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    dots Submission Name: Swoon (working title)dots
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    Author: rev.jpfadeproof
    ASL Info:    27/m/nyc
    Elite Ratio:    6.23 - 366/349/146
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 240
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 480



    Description:
       little ditty before bed


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    dotsSwoon (working title)dots
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    I want to swoon the wheat fields of your lips
    As a monsoon
    So when I smile your mouth arcs as a stalk of grain
    And when my tongue pirouettes you taste me

    I want you to fall into the silver circle of my arms
    As a shadow
    So when you breathe my chest heaves like the sea
    And when your eyes close I dream

    dicicco cosentino ©






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