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    dots Submission Name: Swoon (working title)dots
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    Author: rev.jpfadeproof
    ASL Info:    27/m/nyc
    Elite Ratio:    6.08 - 366/364/154
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       little ditty before bed


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    dotsSwoon (working title)dots
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    I want to swoon the wheat fields of your lips
    As a monsoon
    So when I smile your mouth arcs as a stalk of grain
    And when my tongue pirouettes you taste me

    I want you to fall into the silver circle of my arms
    As a shadow
    So when you breathe my chest heaves like the sea
    And when your eyes close I dream

    dicicco cosentino ©






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    ||| Comments |||
      This is lovely and romantic.

    "So when you breathe my chest heaves like the sea"

    This is powerful imagery.

    It is an interesting perspective, "wanting" to do those things.

    It almost seems like it speaks of loss vs. romance. Or of a wish for how things were once, either with this lover or another.

    Maybe I'm mixing that up with my own lack of romance. LOL Maybe I just want someone to want to fall into the silver circle of my arms . . . either way, I enjoyed this write.
    | Posted on 2017-02-19 00:00:00 | by JanePlane | [ Reply to This ]


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