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    dots Submission Name: In That Day dots
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    Author: rev.jpfadeproof
    ASL Info:    27/m/nyc
    Elite Ratio:    6.14 - 366/359/149
    Words: 258
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsIn That Day dots
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    When I’m gone you’ll see the ash-coal moon and remember my sensitivity
    How I’d bow to kiss your burl knees and rise to stroke your face

    You’ll sense the stars and remember how I traced your features
    Among them as Van Gogh and plucked the fireflies from your eyes

    In that day you’ll wear the red sky and recall when I wrapped
    You in myself and bore the wolves with mine own body to hide you

    You’ll find the sequoia and blush with the thought of my size and
    How you conquered it to capture the cardinal of my ecstasy

    You cradled it in your aviary of bone like a resplendent ruby
    A heart that offers its hymn to you as the orphan offers her incandescence

    I will leap in your belly with thrashing wings; you will feel me deeply:
    Intracellularly, like the patter of newborn galaxies

    I will rejoice in your womb and you will rejoice in the rivulet from your
    Breast that gives me suck like the Virgin’s breast that suckled the Savior

    And so in that day-

    When the heavens and earth incinerate like ancient empires,
    You shall see me standing in testimony of you,
    In love with you, having withstood

    The end- the eternal lover that loved you with an everlasting affection,
    He that burned the vehement heat

    With our fire


    dicicco cosentino ©




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