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    dots Submission Name: Waning Moon dots
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    Author: rev.jpfadeproof
    ASL Info:    27/m/nyc
    Elite Ratio:    6.14 - 366/359/149
    Words: 196
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsWaning Moon dots
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    The stars fell Baroque over the
    Waning moon as I sipped evening from her lips

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    Her eyes expanded
    As constellations and revolved in mine--                    she taught me of love that night

    Of how even we can dissolve
                        Like the moon being licked from our nakedness

    ---

    But I wouldn’t listen; I didn’t want to listen-                         I just lied there amazed at
    Her abdomen; it was divine; her navel was the universe                    and

    The stars exhaled with each wave of breath-
    I was allured by the flare that lied in the shade of her ribs

    It reminded me of the moonflower that refuses to spread               her white wings
    But beneath the cascade of moonlight- it gave me hope

    In bloodshed-

    A boldness in the battlement           of           evening

    ---

    And so the stars faded into sparrows
                                                           and the black of night into the white of day
                                                                                         the sea swelled and the shore fell

    Around our ankles
    As I pressed my mouth to her labial lips to sip the sun

    dicicco cosentino ©





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