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    dots Submission Name: Distant dots
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    Author: rev.jpfadeproof
    ASL Info:    27/m/nyc
    Elite Ratio:    6.14 - 366/359/149
    Words: 33
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsDistant dots
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    It's mid-night again-
    All is dark
    And
    She is                                              distant
    Like a
    Burning star whittling light.

    dicicco cosentino ©





    Submitted on 2016-12-05 02:08:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Sometimes miniatures work best to capture moments of elegance. And yet this feels like the pause between rounds of a boxing match. Just my thoughts.
    | Posted on 2016-12-05 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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