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    dots Submission Name: 7 Autumn evening Haikusdots
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    Author: rev.jpfadeproof
    ASL Info:    27/m/nyc
    Elite Ratio:    6.14 - 366/359/149
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dots7 Autumn evening Haikusdots
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    I.

    Crystal moon
    Supple as a woman
    Body against mine

    II.

    Deer prance in night snow
    Icy shadows fixed on grass
    Breath scales the moon

    III.

    Leaves whirling through snow
    Swish, swirl, swoosh, skip, brown and tan
    Shattered under foot

    IV.

    Kimono lashes
    Wrap moon-eyes as crickets dream
    I'm lullabies

    V.

    Frosted apples
    Dissolve over waning snow
    Crows cackle and caw

    VI.

    Quartz snowfall - stars
    Shiver in pearlescent skies
    Flakes fleck in jay's crest

    VII.

    Arrows of snow thrash
    Starry faces- nuzzling
    Lips pas de deux

    dicicco cosentino




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