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    dots Submission Name: Styledots
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    Author: rev.jpfadeproof
    ASL Info:    27/m/nyc
    Elite Ratio:    6.19 - 366/354/146
    Words: 277
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 371
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1769



    Description:
       before bed

    format messed up by way of length of line.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsStyledots
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    This morning I found a blue-jay hiding behind the frost of dawn
    It starkly passed through the gangly trees, a beautiful gift in Autumn-

    The blue sapphire of summer soaring among the beige to remind me of the coming of the colors-
    Soon the chatoyant flowers shall march- and the wheeling wind

    That pushes the sun over our bodies, through our hair, between our teeth will blow-

    I see your eyes in that ball of sky; Two papaya seeds
    Whizzing about her head on the hunt- blue lightning streaking across the snowy ley

    For white capped acorns strewn about the shivering logs

    She moved as elegant as you- non-stop and
    Sexy
    Like the cerulean incandescence of fire

    -Her diligence evokes your efficiency-

    The way you tether electricity and weave the bolts of purple in your hair
    Your
    Tiny body pulling and banging and twisting and tightening the engines into submission

    I see your hands in her feet – as she clasps the nut
    -bim bim bim-
    She strikes the acorn with her black bill to reveal the sphere of oak wrapped with light

    She has style-

    A mosaic of royal blue and white, sky blue and teal, all framed by black
    Her wings stoic as stones, her song bright as the snowcapped moon

    -And, baby-
    You have style- it’s in the way you:

    Smile- style
    Sing- style
    Sit- style
    Stand- style
    Serve- style
    Sleep- style

    -The way you love me-

    Style

    dicicco cosentino ©




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