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    dots Submission Name: Musings of love dots
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    Author: rev.jpfadeproof
    ASL Info:    27/m/nyc
    Elite Ratio:    6.08 - 366/364/154
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMusings of love dots
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    I think most people misunderstand love
    Or at best, they underestimate it-

    They think it’s Hollywood, and warm-fuzzies
    And Soft puppies and wine in bed and carousels and upside down kisses

    But

    Love
    True love
    Will grind you and toss what’s left to the bared teeth of night

    It’s Van Goah putting the knife to his ear and his heart to the canvass

    Love debones you like a fish
    You live and die for the sustenance of another

    It’s the grinning sadness of the salmon that swims upstream to lay her last eggs

    Love-

    Is Christ on the cross-

    Back shredded, tongue swollen with dehydration and crowned with thorns
    -(And all for me- all because of me – all in spite of me)-
    Expecting nothing in return

    Now
    That’s
    Love
    That’s artistry
    That’s
    Style

    dicicco cosentino ©




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      I agree with rws. This seems a little messy not to sound rude but I would have labelled it as prose instead.

    I did like some of your intense wording like the salmon, the fish and Christ. I also thought that the upside down kiss bit was telling. I agree with that idea completely. I've always believed that if one ventures to write about love has got to be in an outright passionate fashion and you certainly fulfilled that requirement which is kinda hard to get nowadays.

    As for love itself, I gotta say that I can only speak as a bystander since I haven't been in a relationship for about 3 years much less have I fallen in love, of late. Be all that as it may, my current conception of love has become more down-to-earth. I'm not very willing to fall over hills for someone without making damn sure they feel the same about me. I guess that experience, for good or bad, has shaped my approach. And that bit about not expecting something in return doesn't go with me either. I feel, and this is merely my own private form of dealing with it, is that if love is not reciprocal then "love" is not.

    Perhaps, when you are older there are more things to consider before letting oneself become lost in someone else without being, at least, slightly careful.


    Kind regards,


    Erick
    | Posted on 2017-03-12 00:00:00 | by Ethan Brody | [ Reply to This ]
      This is much more raw and less "artsy" than anything you've submitted before (that I can remember at least). What led you to this examination of/conclusion about love, I wonder? Sometimes love becomes the choice we make rather than the emotion we feel and our loyalties to dreams are tested. That is a real test of desire, when there seems to be no reward at all. Hmmm...
    | Posted on 2017-02-27 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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