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    dots Submission Name: The Docile and the Damneddots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    23/M/Columbus, Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    5.3 - 207/276/228
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe Docile and the Damneddots
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    My life is set with props
    like in the movies but less artistic
    more mismanaged and superficial
    it eats at me like acid
    like there is some expectation
    to follow blind while burning
    but I notice
    inconsistencies a little too well
    and you messed with chance and nature
    and it rubs my fur against grain
    the wrong way
    until I'm wild with waning wrath
    and you suffocate my nature
    god damn you

    I wish all kinds of plague
    upon your houses
    wish all towers toppled
    all names forgotten to history
    and all monuments buried fossil
    but you push and hold and force
    me into little boxes
    by the hillside
    quiet graves




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