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    dots Submission Name: I Found You In...(working title)dots
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    Author: rev.jpfadeproof
    ASL Info:    27/m/nyc
    Elite Ratio:    6.16 - 366/357/146
    Words: 378
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    I can’t help but think that my venture of words is like the distant light of evening
    That pulsed from the stars eons ago and now sets in the eyes of lovers

    Perhaps perishing is that aspect of affection
    Needed to move love forward- it’s that which taught the “star-crossed” lovers
    That the glint that brightens the face has thrashed long ago- that
    Its host is now cold as the space it bobs in by the time it orbits the iris-

    It’s that radiance that brought us together-
    And it’s that radiance that lifts the blue curtain of day so that I may find                you

    Again and again- you arrive in everything and everything carries me to you-

    In the beige of trees I see your knees knelt before the ailing child and laugh
    My little Yaso Yanking
    The giggles from their tiny throats like morning pulls the song from the sparrow

    I found you in the acre of lavender that proudly raises its amethyst arms in revolution-
    I will harvest your violet tresses
    That break over the crag of your shoulder like waves of the sea

    I see you in the red stones that drip with the blood of the bison
    That unravels in rain-dances and chants and truth–
    I hear you in the silver wolf and golden hawk-

    I look at the freckled evening flecked with stars and see your freckled face smiling
    The pearlescent moon has set in your teeth that bear heavy in my body

    Your breasts are pinecones that I gather in my hands and bring to mouth to seed
    They flourish in me like forests, my body expanding to extol all of you: your

    Purple plume of hair- your toes that carry you to me- your fingers that hold me there
    Your hands collect me in pieces; your body leaves me whole-
    Your eyes are lighthouses that guide my ship to your shore and dispel the storm-

    I found you in the wilderness;
    All of you to admire -all of you to discover- all of your to explore

    dicicco cosentino ©




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      This reminds me of a modern day song of Solomon as the intimacy and romance can be the literal physical relationship between man and woman as you delightfully personify these natural elements. Then again the magnitude of your words in imagery and their context speaks to me of something higher.

    Either way or both, this is mesmerizing, the language of love intertwined in your ability to paint your landscape, the environment of this tale, raise this piece up into a most esteemed position on this site and amongst many things I have read. I very much enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing.
    | Posted on 2016-12-14 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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