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    dots Submission Name: Aspen in Winterdots
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    Author: annie0888
    ASL Info:    49/f/LA
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 327/382/120
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsAspen in Winterdots
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    Aspen in Winter

    This tree in beauty
    stands alone. No leaves obscure
    the bare and raw and roughed up bark.

    Three seasons gone--
    rain and storm and scorching blast,
    unleashed gusts, the air grows colder.

    Still, her branches rise
    to praise or curse the creator
    who set her in his weather,
    taught her to be shelter.









    Submitted on 2016-12-20 22:22:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      they say the world is cruel and lonely
    for those who seem too crushed to breathe
    but we all need a reason to believe
    we all need a reason to believe...

    Just a few thoughts on yours.

    | Posted on 2017-02-28 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very beautiful. I especially love the last 3 lines. Taught her to be shelter -- is very deep. It reminds me of Dylan's song Shelter From the Storm, and the idea implied therein that a woman's role is to be someone's shelter, "in his weather". A very remarkable piece, you should be proud you wrote this.
    | Posted on 2017-01-06 00:00:00 | by WriteSomething | [ Reply to This ]


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