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Submission Name: Aspen in Winter dots

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Author:	annie0888
ASL Info:	49/f/LA
Elite Ratio:	4.76 - 327/382/120
Words:	74

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
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Aspen in Winter dots

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Aspen in Winter

This tree in beauty
stands alone. No leaves obscure
the bare and raw and roughed up bark.

Three seasons gone--
rain and storm and scorching blast,
unleashed gusts, the air grows colder.

Still, her branches rise
to praise or curse the creator
who set her in his weather,
taught her to be shelter.

Submitted on 2016-12-20 22:22:32 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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they say the world is cruel and lonely
for those who seem too crushed to breathe
but we all need a reason to believe
we all need a reason to believe...

Just a few thoughts on yours.

| Posted on 2017-02-28 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
This is very beautiful. I especially love the last 3 lines. Taught her to be shelter -- is very deep. It reminds me of Dylan's song Shelter From the Storm, and the idea implied therein that a woman's role is to be someone's shelter, "in his weather". A very remarkable piece, you should be proud you wrote this.
| Posted on 2017-01-06 00:00:00 | by WriteSomething | [ Reply to This ]

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