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    dots Submission Name: the daily supernaturaldots
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    Author: annie0888
    ASL Info:    49/f/LA
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 327/382/122
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsthe daily supernaturaldots
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    the daily supernatural

    a sister hears a sister calling
    across ocean-desert-mountains
    boards a plane
    weighing forty-five tons
    floats weightless through the air
    seven thousand miles
    arrives the same day she left
    to meet a dying mother
    who awakens to say hello
    before she says goodbye
    and closes her eyes
    to live forever in light
    and even darkness
    is not dark




    Submitted on 2016-12-20 22:29:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Somehow loss makes life more lively than it might be if all the pieces were in place for another typical day. And then we realize that each moment that has passed has gained value because we have lost the sameness that made them typical.
    | Posted on 2017-02-28 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      I know you're the serious type when it comes to your writing but I don't see any flaws with this. The writing is direct and the intelligent way you've put it comes across as simple and profound. I like very much the movement aspect of this poem; it's like life will not ever sit still for you -mixing humility with what is hard learned.

    Thought it was excellent. Not preachy.
    | Posted on 2017-02-03 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]


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