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    dots Submission Name: the daily supernaturaldots
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    Author: annie0888
    ASL Info:    49/f/LA
    Elite Ratio:    4.79 - 327/377/120
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsthe daily supernaturaldots
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    the daily supernatural

    a sister hears a sister calling
    across ocean-desert-mountains
    boards a plane
    weighing forty-five tons
    floats weightless through the air
    seven thousand miles
    arrives the same day she left
    to meet a dying mother
    who awakens to say hello
    before she says goodbye
    and closes her eyes
    to live forever in light
    and even darkness
    is not dark




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      I know you're the serious type when it comes to your writing but I don't see any flaws with this. The writing is direct and the intelligent way you've put it comes across as simple and profound. I like very much the movement aspect of this poem; it's like life will not ever sit still for you -mixing humility with what is hard learned.

    Thought it was excellent. Not preachy.
    | Posted on 2017-02-03 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]


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