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Author: Namlooc20
ASL Info:    26/Male/Spokane, WA
Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 359 /327 /107
Words: 109
Class/Type: Poetry /Romance
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It's been years since I've posted here. I feel like I've become better at my hobby in that time. I've grown from an angst driven teenager. But this is where I started and I wanted to make sure that some of my newer work ended up on this site.


The cooling engine was likened to breath
once pouring clouds into the air, fading
into the absolute nothingness. Death
on any uncertain terms would just sing.

The sound of our voices far from ringing
over the quieted tone of Thom Yorke.
And yet, I could feel my cold heart singing.
You confided in me, your eyes a cork

relieving bottled up pressure beneath.
I brushed the fire from your deep hazel eyes,
and it caught my heart ablaze in a wreath.
Finally here, a role I would reprise

At this moment I knew my heart was taken,
but in your eyes the sign just read vacant.

Submitted on 2016-12-26 17:59:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  The ending was a surprise. Maybe in this case it isnt personal. Females can be easily distracted at some of the worst times by even the most trivial things.

I love the opening lines.
| Posted on 2017-01-07 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]

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