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    dots Submission Name: The Light in this Roomdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1514/479
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe Light in this Roomdots
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    I am awake on this beautiful morning
    Heart outstretched to heavens most intimate kiss
    What can I say about this
    You adore me

    My every breath in awe of life's most perfect majesty

    I have never felt so safe or certain, surely serenity has saturated herself into eternity

    What can compare to the face of the one I love?
    More than diamonds and all the facets of this beautiful place I call home,
    Your eyes
    In my minds eyes
    I dwell in you as you dwell in me

    Oh to be overwhelmed with worship
    And to anyone what has changed about today
    But that I hear your voice and the presence of the one true God has revealed itself

    The lights haven't changed except they are the brilliant light of you
    Sentient
    Graceful
    Hands and arms wrapped around me
    Body bent over and exposing intimately
    A magnificent union




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    ||| Comments |||
      I have never liked writes depicting sex or love making, come to that. I liked yours though you made it sound sweet and intense at the same time. The writing I mean .... I enjoyed your wording. it is powerful. I particularly liked lines such as:

    " My every breath in awe of life's most perfect majesty"

    "I have never felt so safe or certain, surely serenity has saturated herself into eternity"

    I loved the first I think it is my favourite. The second is great too but I would have invented it just to make it even stronger that it is ... maybe something like:

    " have I never felt so safe or certain, surely serenity has saturated herself into eternity"

    It was fun to read this,
    kind regards,

    Ethan Brody
    | Posted on 2017-03-01 00:00:00 | by Ethan Brody | [ Reply to This ]
      So pretty. Your spiritual poetry is much better than mine ever was. You make it sound like you're in a romance with God, and it's the best thing ever. And that is lovely.
    | Posted on 2017-01-21 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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