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    dots Submission Name: If I Faildots
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    Author: hybridsongwrite
    ASL Info:    20 / M / MN, USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 185/163/68
    Words: 416
    Class/Type: Lyrics/The pain inside
    Total Views: 835
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Symbolic about the purposeful detachment from empathy and emotion in order to not care anymore


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    dotsIf I Faildots
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    Life has it’s hand to my throat, squeezing, pushing as I turn blue
    Back against the wall, if I fall, it wouldn’t be surprising with what I’ve been through
    I smile and spit in her face as she releases me from her grip
    I fall to one knee, look to the ground, and see a gun and a clip
    It seems like a way out, or at least that’s the way that it seems
    But who really wins in the end when the pawns and the players switch teams?
    Fear sets into her eyes and she thinks back to everything she said
    But much to her surprise I put the gun up to my own head

    If I fail, If I fail
    I’m taking everybody down with me
    If I fail…
    I still win!
    2X

    She lied to me with words that pierced me like a dagger
    Each line adding onto the burden that has fed into my anger
    Not a friend, not something more, never anything she had ever claimed
    Just another incident of a “who is he?”, “oh, it’s what’s-his-name”
    And she stood there silently as he manipulated and violated her trust
    Complicit in her lack of action as if it shouldn’t mean anything to us
    And the sense of loss of losing someone so close after so much time
    The easy way out is to leave it all behind

    If I fail, If I fail
    I’m taking everybody down with me
    If I fail…
    I still win!
    2X

    /bridge/
    I can’t take the pressure, it’s eating at me
    I can’t sleep, I can’t breathe, I can’t find a release
    /solo/

    If I pull the trigger I leave the pain for a bit of release
    I’ve had the weight of a life on my hands for a decade at least
    How will you handle losing someone, knowing you’re the reason why?
    How will you handle the demons that will keep you up at night
    When you contemplate and analyze things you can’t understand
    Hoping for some release you feel for the blood that’s on your hands
    If I kill this human side of me and leave a hollow shell
    How will you ever life with yourself?

    If I fail, If I fail
    I’m taking everybody down with me
    If I fail…
    I still win!
    4X

    If I kill this human side of me and leave behind a hollow shell
    You had better learn to pray for forgiveness




    Submitted on 2016-12-29 11:44:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      DAMMM this is deep! I loved it. ALL of it. Is this a song you wrote??!!
    | Posted on 2017-01-20 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]


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