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    dots Submission Name: My Acid Tripdots
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    Author: eggshells
    ASL Info:    23/M/WA
    Elite Ratio:    3.25 - 28/71/66
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
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    dotsMy Acid Tripdots
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    First, I'll peel back all of my skin
    And let it
    Crawl right
    In.

    Last,
    I release
    Myself from myself
    And watch as all of my horrors begin.

    Then the doubts start calling
    my name,
    But my cognition is stalling on
    this plain.

    As the regret starts mounting
    What's left of my
    Consciousness
    Starts counting.

    Up until
    Incontinence
    Opens my third eye
    And reveals the facts that kill.




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    ||| Comments |||
      I have unwillingly made such trip once. It was a nightmare. I do recall the sheer horror, the heat, the doubts, the regrets, and the facts that can kill which are nothing but what can change one's existence.

    Dealing with whatever wells up from those experiences and actually allow, either unwittingly or not, go on a downright spiral might actually help one to heal or even make one stronger.

    I do not regret anything I have done so far, and it might seem tacky, but those events or bad decisions made me the person I am now.

    Well, It's certainly a riveting piece. I'm not really sure whether I would have labelled it as lyrics, sounds more like a poem/write in progress to me, no offence intended, of course.

    Well take care and be careful if you continue making such trips,

    Ethan Brody
    | Posted on 2017-01-11 00:00:00 | by Ethan Brody | [ Reply to This ]


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