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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 224
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    My life is that of shattered glass, or that of a deer in headlights
    Attempting to explain the turmoil I quarrel with to you,
    I would be better off suddenly speaking a foreign language…
    Than to actually attempt to reveal the true nature of this inferno that thrives from within.

    My days are long but my nights are always longer,
    No amount of medication can truly take away the darkness I have been plagued with.
    The distain I carry for myself
    For all my failures
    For the escape goat I allowed myself to become
    For the addict I am
    Cant you see!?
    No amount of words, description, or clarity will ever be enough for you to understand.

    And Yes, it is such a hindrance when it comes to personal relationships.

    Yet, who am I if not that little girl?
    Who am I if not that addict
    Who am I if not my mothers personal escape goat?

    Ohhh…. You see?

    Just the tip of the iceberg that is of this internal personal game of tug-a-war I play….
    Current Personal Relationship VS Current Sense of Self

    That sense of self I have had since I could remember…. It is all I know.





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      Hi Jackie,

    I really enjoy reading your prose. And while this piece is quite sad, it honestly reflects so much of what a lot of people go through on a daily basis.

    It takes a lot of courage to put something like "Self" out there for the whole world to read. I commend you for your sense of self with being able to share some of your world with us.

    I hope whatever brought you to writing "Self" has passed. I hope that you realize that you have great value - no matter where you find yourself in life.

    This is somewhat of cliché...but it is quite true: "it is always darkest before the dawn."

    Have hope...

    K

    | Posted on 2017-01-30 00:00:00 | by krs3332003 | [ Reply to This ]


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