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    dots Submission Name: Maybe He’s Watching my Roaddots
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    Author: lukewarm
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    dotsMaybe He’s Watching my Roaddots
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    There aren’t too many places around here where
    Your can put hands to wood and hear the clink of dusty glasses
    Pulled off the highway, took a dirt path through the pine trees
    After three beers anyone gets to talking

    In my dream last night we sang a song, me and this stranger
    The first verse tumbled out of him like a coal-powered train
    He and the bartender turned towards me
    I opened my mouth, wasn’t sure what would come out
    But I sang the high chorus , my voice choked
    with whisky and reverence

    There are atheists in foxholes
    But god hides
    In the bottoms of bottles everywhere




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    ||| Comments |||
      Gah, you are so good at those one-liner (esque) endings. Like, do you have a shamelessly self-promoting Instagram account where you make little pictures of your poems in typewriter font and post them with hashtags like #poetry?

    That sound super bitchy and sarcastic but I'm serious. Write a fucking book already.
    | Posted on 2017-01-10 00:00:00 | by etheror | [ Reply to This ]


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