Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: In this life so emptydots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 771
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 939



    Description:
       Empty....
    Blue sky, green grass, blue sea....a colorless life without you


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsIn this life so emptydots
    -------------------------------------------


    Should I breathe? I ask myself.

    When I became us; we became me, and my soul.

    A soul aspires to live but fails in life.
    A life that aspires to happiness, but fails to see any color.

    Oh, how the black sand waits to reflect the color of white.
    How it waits for the sun to caress to glow in the dark.
    For my life is empty beyond space and darkness.
    So can I smile with your soul beside me?

    Too long to be empty in this barren journey.
    Oh god! I wait for faith to have a meaning.
    The salt washed away now from the desert of tears.
    Can this life have a cause to walk ahead?

    For all I have is a single heart to beat,
    unlike the rest of my body, a cruel way to strive.
    Complete this pair my love with this empty shell,
    and so I call upon the one to keep me alive...

    In this life so empty




    Submitted on 2017-01-26 03:12:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    201653

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    The Song on Your Guitar written by SavedDragon
    May 31 2018 written by Chelebel
    Summer Nights written by ollie_wicked
    Bond written by saartha
    Devils in the Details written by endlessgame23
    Munyonyo written by expiring_touch
    In the Mouth of Elysium written by HisNameIsNoMore
    To Glow written by krs3332003
    Cage written by distortedcloud
    Life changes in a moment written by Ramneet
    Our Cinder Crisis written by SavedDragon
    Giving written by jjd
    Incubus written by monad
    Wavelength written by saartha
    Hopelessly Blind written by ForgottenGraves
    A Sonnet for Nina written by SavedDragon
    Love Can Be... written by HAVENSMITH92
    The Promise written by annie0888
    One Thing written by Wolfwatching
    Wish written by Daniel Barlow
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Date night written by expiring_touch
    In My Head written by faideddarkness
    Red Barn written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Trails written by Daniel Barlow
    Linger written by saartha
    Hollow Points written by RequiemOfDreams
    new moon written by CrypticBard
    Treasure Chest written by PieceOfCake
    Once Again written by krs3332003

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry