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    dots Submission Name: In this life so emptydots
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    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Description:
       Empty....
    Blue sky, green grass, blue sea....a colorless life without you


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    dotsIn this life so emptydots
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    Should I breathe? I ask myself.

    When I became us; we became me, and my soul.

    A soul aspires to live but fails in life.
    A life that aspires to happiness, but fails to see any color.

    Oh, how the black sand waits to reflect the color of white.
    How it waits for the sun to caress to glow in the dark.
    For my life is empty beyond space and darkness.
    So can I smile with your soul beside me?

    Too long to be empty in this barren journey.
    Oh god! I wait for faith to have a meaning.
    The salt washed away now from the desert of tears.
    Can this life have a cause to walk ahead?

    For all I have is a single heart to beat,
    unlike the rest of my body, a cruel way to strive.
    Complete this pair my love with this empty shell,
    and so I call upon the one to keep me alive...

    In this life so empty




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