Description: Thinking a lot about memory, perspective, and reality these days.
"Ah Light" is an old poem by poet Wendy Lee Spacek. She used to be girlunderglass on here.Here's a copy: http://saartha.deviantart.com/journal/Ah-Light-232789366
The capsizing boat one was a deviantart poet, but for the life I me I don't remember which one. I know I had the poem in my favorites but it seems to be gone now.
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The sun, molten
dripping
up from the river,
spilling everywhere
Or,
more precisely:
the world rolling
in the warm shallows of space
perpetually, gracelessly
:
My favorite line of poetry
deals with sun on the water
"Ah light--
moving westward down the Mississippi."
Light as boats capsizing,
the endless glint of it.
:
Rereading,
the line is different
(vertical, not westward)
and the boats
another poem entirely
and isn't that always
the case?
:
Shot through with gold
fog scraping the bark
of the evergreens
is also sun on the water
if I choose it to be
And
I have misunderstood
every last moment
on this planet but
it is still
I love this. I love the imagery. I love the way you play with the ideas of memory, understanding and perspective! I love the way you express our ability to select seeing things in various ways.
"is also sun on the water
if I choose it to be"
And I love your ending lines:
"And
I have misunderstood
every last moment
on this planet but
it is still
beautiful."
My one critique is that I'm not in love with that opening stanza.
The words "molten" and "dripping up" don't paint a picture for me that I can "see" or at least it doesn't ring true. It feels forced somehow and it distracts from the piece--for me, anyway. But maybe that is the point. Maybe it has to do with the perspective of the speaker and how he or she chooses to perceive the sun on the water at first. I'm probably supposed to feel it is inaccurate. Is that it?
Anyway, I really, really enjoyed this read. It feels important. Like it says something that a lot of people need to hear!
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