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    dots Submission Name: Blood Liondots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    23/M/Columbus, Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    5.3 - 207/276/228
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsBlood Liondots
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    They've got their fangs in deep
    pulling this way while
    slippery saliva glazes stubby fingers
    odd nubs and crooks and caps
    stuffed wrong into the crooked maw
    seething hunger and raving
    mad with warning danger
    whole face scrunched in fever
    wounding wild and frenzied
    rabid rips at the flesh
    and the beast snarls.

    Fell prey to tell
    this hell is trying
    souls and silence
    lost time and vibrance
    luster faded resigns with
    every opposite reaction
    to opportunity and pliance
    trying and an absent pride
    If I would ever be a lion.




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