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    dots Submission Name: Harbingerdots

    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    26/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 136/243/156
    Words: 244
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Glass breathed apart, marble and cheap
    potted plants, this would-be air
    of non-chalance beneath
    the concrete grid. The slowing down day
    lit up the forehead lines, and funnily enough -
    amber eyes, which - I’d just read - are rare
    suddenly sliding
    a man
    into my view and up
    the escalator, too close
    to be decent.

    The city wet and brown
    as the Chinese
    umbrella picked up amongst all sorts
    of brightly colored junk,
    welcomed –‘Just Lviv it’ -- you read,
    rolling Balkan accents off the spiral staircase --
    Ah, yes, Juliet Binoche and her craft -
    It stained my lips, spilled over
    the white lace of the tablecloth
    down the street
    into the cobbled pavement –
    like the candle that couldn’t hold
    in front of Virgin Mary – plead thus, as I have,
    strolling along cul-de-sacs
    with Gothic crosses behind bars
    and snow leftovers–
    plead, like when that snow piled up
    and took the city by surprise, and silenced it,
    except for tolling bells among
    the falling snowflakes.

    Let’s ride back then watch the sun
    play catch up with the landscape and paint
    in furious bold strokes.
    Some small church swerved
    against the blue glass wall,
    its gilded domes a blinding flash –
    the one before a blast –
    engines aroar and wind
    knocked out
    this feeling --
    skin on

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