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Desayuno Serenade


Author: krs3332003
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Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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Memories are the best form of time travel.


Desayuno Serenade



Aurora peeks through
quickly closing the curtain
too tired to shine

A lake of thoughts
waves that drift and draw
on memories, from long ago

She was here, once
content and beautiful
a surge of cogitation

The brilliant silence
so the clock rewinds
to melodious musings

Flickering echoes
from that sublime song
our dance, our time

It stirs the mind
and pauses the heart
that wondrous waltz

And the wind begins
whispering to return
so as it should

“Thank you”,
breakfast arrives,
and she walks away…

2017 by Kelly R. Sullivan




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  I really liked the opening lines. The energy it takes to relive a memory drawn from the sun itself.
Brings a new light to cloudy days and dark minds.
The longing from this piece hit me from both sides.
Needing to be inside the memory to live a life that has already passed.

Great write 😁 thanks for sharing
| Posted on 2017-07-27 00:00:00 | by endlessgame23 | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked this. it was a sweet piece to read. What it made me feel or what stirred, actually, was the mind blowing notion/fact that one's mind never stops producing pictures and stories like a never ending
manufacturing company. It strikes me that it is so damn hard not to think or to abandon" the waves that drift and draw"

I enjoyed the imagery and the subtle sleepless night that was portrayed. And you are right, memories are the best time travel one can hope to get, although I rather stick to the present, or doggedly attempt to do so, no offence intended, of course.


Take care,


Ethan Brody
| Posted on 2017-02-28 00:00:00 | by Ethan Brody | [ Reply to This ]


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