rest and pause, are they the same thing? the poem is so well written i can argue that pause could be pulse - in which case it's an inventive substitute for pulse since in my(twisted) mind a pause from rest is a pulse
sand size speck is even better than sand sized speck
because it forces you to draw out the quick little sentence. it is not one i'd like to attempt while drunk....
anyway, the protraction exemplifies the aspect
of feeling small/being put under the microscope.
i commend the poem, the write, the author for the attention that has gone into 36 well placed and formatted words.
the simple language
shows that poetry its own
non-complicated language, it actually makes me think of someone standing with both feet planted (in a stationary position) and launching themselves a good height up on to another level.
one thing i think the poem lacks is a sonnet type punch the likes of which you'd typically find in the closing couplet. (last two lines).
Tidal, is nice, it's evidence of thought, and crafting, and cohesiveness, on the other hand though i felt the ending was a bit greeting card like in that it lays out what is to be felt. It's not really inspirational, surprising, subtle etc. It comes across, therefore, as easy, mass produced and impersonal.
If you were getting a card from your Valentine would you want something like that or some words they had written with their own hand?
I guess my point is this. Poetry needs a point. Where i think you have done so finely up until the last line, that sweet sweetness, that gut punch, that super subtlety, whatever it is.... it's missing.