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Night study

Author: lori_tab
ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
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My 6 yr old daughter asked me to read this to her. She exclaimed that it was about God and how he thinks of us.

I wrote it thinking about how beautiful my children and husband are sleeping and smiling in their dreams. I remembered someone somewhere talking about the art created at night, hours you wish were spent sleeping can produce works inspired by a restless spirit, and yes as my daughter said, inspired by someone greater, moving my heart as his is moved.

Night study

Is it the privilege
Of gazing upon my face
Moved eternally by
The tone of my skin
The length of my eyelashes
I am awake

As I watch the world
As they lay at night sleeping
The ones I love
Now I realize
Eyes upon mine
Catch the same starry night

Submitted on 2017-02-20 10:42:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  the guardian guarded
by the self-same eyes
littered with memories
of a perfect prize

asleep on the outskirts
of her lonely town
she whispers, "protect us
now I lay me down"

Just my thoughts on yours.
| Posted on 2017-02-24 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]

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