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    dots Submission Name: Night studydots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 53
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 749
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 329



    Description:
        My 6 yr old daughter asked me to read this to her. She exclaimed that it was about God and how he thinks of us.

    I wrote it thinking about how beautiful my children and husband are sleeping and smiling in their dreams. I remembered someone somewhere talking about the art created at night, hours you wish were spent sleeping can produce works inspired by a restless spirit, and yes as my daughter said, inspired by someone greater, moving my heart as his is moved.


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    dotsNight studydots
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    Is it the privilege
    Of gazing upon my face
    Moved eternally by
    The tone of my skin
    The length of my eyelashes
    I am awake

    As I watch the world
    As they lay at night sleeping
    The ones I love
    Now I realize
    Eyes upon mine
    Catch the same starry night




    Submitted on 2017-02-20 10:42:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      the guardian guarded
    by the self-same eyes
    littered with memories
    of a perfect prize

    asleep on the outskirts
    of her lonely town
    she whispers, "protect us
    now I lay me down"

    Just my thoughts on yours.
    | Posted on 2017-02-24 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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