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    dots Submission Name: No Goodbyedots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsNo Goodbyedots
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    There was no goodbye
    It’s too late for that
    You left without any indication,
    Yet, I should have known better, and I had not a clue
    Left with the remanence of our dysfunctional life we shared
    Only the memories of us will live on.
    New ones can no longer be obtained
    Your laughter is that of a faraway whisper that I can hardly remember.
    I never got to say goodbye
    My heart aches for only one more day with you
    I anguish over your last moments on this earth
    The loneliness you must have felt
    Yet, anger builds within me for you left
    Left me here with even more questions than before
    I don’t know if we’ll ever meet again
    I don’t know where if anywhere, you are.
    Searching for so much, lost between what was and what is…




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      many have tried to put grief into words. the most powerful pieces are ones not flawed by analogy or fancy words, but rather pieces filled with honesty and anguish over what the writer feels and/or has felt. lots of love to you for dealing with this loss, and kudos for having the courage to speak about it.
    | Posted on 2017-03-27 00:00:00 | by gwenn sundala | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm so sorry for your loss. This was a colorful depiction of that, the range of emotion encourages me that you have been able to really feel your passion rather than tip toeing around your own feelings. It is good to speak from that place of brokenness with the honesty of our hearts. This was brave to share, thank you.
    | Posted on 2017-02-21 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem weeps of loss. For that, I am sorry. I can see that the speaker is in pain. It indicates suicide or a tragic accident, but I may be wrong. Either way, there seems to be no words of solace that anyone can give.

    Except maybe to say, that you are not as alone as you feel right now.

    Others have experienced loss. Seek them out and gain comfort in numbers.

    Good luck.
    | Posted on 2017-02-20 00:00:00 | by JanePlane | [ Reply to This ]


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