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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.38 - 103/230/145
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 171
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       Some unorganized thoughts.


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    There were voices unheard
    From the inside of my mind
    I doubt it was hers
    I doubted they were mine.
    She was so determined
    To check on my phone
    It was more like a yearning
    To never leave that issue alone.
    Until one day I checked hers
    And found out her guilty conscious
    Slowly deterred
    Confessions and excuses
    As her voice faltered
    Though Illusions all along
    For my amusement
    It was going on for so long
    The ripple in that precious pond
    Echoed and left trails of despair
    I've cheated in the past
    Eventually we paid the same price
    To breathe the same air.




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      Wow. I really enjoyed this. This is a common issue in this day and age. I could feel your surprise and irony in this piece. Good job!
    | Posted on 2017-03-27 00:00:00 | by Poetic_tragedy6 | [ Reply to This ]
      This kind of thing goes on too much right?
    | Posted on 2017-03-16 00:00:00 | by concrete_rose | [ Reply to This ]


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