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    dots Submission Name: Paid The Same Pricedots

    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 497
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       Some unorganized thoughts.

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    dotsPaid The Same Pricedots

    There were voices unheard
    From the inside of my mind
    I doubt it was hers
    I doubted they were mine.
    She was so determined
    To check on my phone
    It was more like a yearning
    To never leave that issue alone.
    Until one day I checked hers
    And found out her guilty conscious
    Slowly deterred
    Confessions and excuses
    As her voice faltered
    Though Illusions all along
    For my amusement
    It was going on for so long.
    The ripple in that precious pond
    Echoed and left trails of despair
    I've cheated in the past
    Eventually we both
    Paid the same price
    To breathe the same air.

    Submitted on 2017-02-21 07:26:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Electronic boxes become our secret boxes of sin and shame, guarded from the ones who we supposedly share everything with... I'll give you everything but the whispers you're not supposed to hear and the things you're not supposed to see, because then you'll see how bored I am of you and our situation.

    Or so it would seem.
    | Posted on 2017-03-29 00:00:00 | by WriteSomething | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. I really enjoyed this. This is a common issue in this day and age. I could feel your surprise and irony in this piece. Good job!
    | Posted on 2017-03-27 00:00:00 | by Poetic_tragedy6 | [ Reply to This ]
      This kind of thing goes on too much right?
    | Posted on 2017-03-16 00:00:00 | by concrete_rose | [ Reply to This ]

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