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Higher Purpose

Author: Latin King
ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104 /232 /145
Words: 93
Class/Type: Poetry /Venting
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Something I had down on paper.

Higher Purpose

Sometimes I doze off
Losing focus
Sometimes I wake from daily
Comas trying to find the
Higher Purpose
In my gloomiest nights I felt
Like Riddick
In a society where people
Are locked up in invisible walls
Real-life mimics
This bad society has me
Smoking skinniest
While others
Resort to putting holes
On binnies
I've come up with more
Though my persona is timid
Bitches seems to only want
To see you at your highest form
Well I hope that bitch
Could see me.

Submitted on 2017-02-23 08:04:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  hate feeling like i'm under a cloud...been there
| Posted on 2017-04-24 00:00:00 | by concrete_rose | [ Reply to This ]
  Daily comas, hit the vein.
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