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    dots Submission Name: Short Piecesdots
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    Author: WolfStar
    ASL Info:    26/F/California
    Elite Ratio:    6.85 - 119/130/46
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Peanut Butter
    Most adults
    won’t eat peanut butter;
    it reminds them too much
    of how small a country
    childhood was.

    The Good
    I’m waiting for everyone
    to get tired of being angry
    so we can marvel equally
    at thoughtful sunrises in the east
    and starshine in bad people.

    Fix It?
    People are frantic
    to find a solution
    that doesn’t change anything.

    Choices
    I chafed because
    you took away my choices.
    Now I am my own pickpocket.

    New York City Subway
    It’s a kind of silent détente;
    if no one
    looks their neighbor in the eye,
    we all get out alive.

    Other People
    You can be a selfish bitch
    or an angry child in adult pants;
    either way
    you’re not stealing my compulsion
    to be kind to you.




    Submitted on 2017-02-23 13:32:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Peanut butter is good if we choose to share it with other people on a New York City subway rather than fix what may not be broken. Somehow all of this makes sense the moment that we step back and gain some perspective. ;)
    | Posted on 2017-02-28 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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