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    dots Submission Name: Ravendots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.34 - 1750/1508/479
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 216
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 935



    Description:
       This is sort of inspired by my sister. But it is also a different perspective for me, I usually write things lately as a love story to God, from one who is fully engaged and excited about God.
    This is for those who don't know in their heart that they are beautiful. That who they were created to be manifest true beauty. As women we are mothers, lovers, daughters añd sisters. It isn't a physical beauty.


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    dotsRavendots
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    She cries because she hides in plain sight

    Her darkened wings rarely catch light

    From her beak to her feet,
    Clothed in black

    Her feathered language speaks through the night

    Anger and hate fade to disbelief
    A cautionary tale, but who is the beast?

    And who then is Beauty?
    Does she only exist in books?
    Concerned only with wit to cover her looks.

    Beauty, she is not
    So she won't use her eyes
    Beauty, a false idol crafted with lies

    Good things and bad thjngs, she doesn't Invision things that way
    The color of sight for her is just gray

    For her blindness and blackness
    She blames her creator

    For if he did love her,
    Why act as if he hate her?
    If she could not attract his light,
    Why did he make her?





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