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    dots Submission Name: dots

    Author: Daniel Barlow
    Elite Ratio:    5.98 - 2124/2082/1579
    Words: 53
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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                   & i wonder sometimes,
                   why you wouldn't take both?
                   why you wouldn't
                   simply have
                   crushed me
                   like the electrical

                   unable to make circuit


                   So full of love
                   So far from love.

    Submitted on 2017-03-01 04:09:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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