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    dots Submission Name: Fly (with one wing)dots
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    Author: Daniel Barlow
    Elite Ratio:    5.98 - 2121/2079/1562
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsFly (with one wing)dots
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                   & i wonder sometimes,
                   why you wouldn't take both?
                   why you wouldn't
                   simply have
                   crushed me
                   like the electrical
                   charge


                   
    unable to make circuit


         





                   So full of love
                   So far from love.









    Submitted on 2017-03-01 04:09:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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