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    Author: Daniel Barlow
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    Words: 53
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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                   & i wonder sometimes,
                   why you wouldn't take both?
                   why you wouldn't
                   simply have
                   crushed me
                   like the electrical
                   charge


                   unable to make circuit


         





                   So full of love
                   So far from love.









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