Author: Daniel Barlow Elite Ratio:    5.93 - 2138 /2109 /1700 Words: 46

Class/Type: Poetry /Love Total Views: 1985 Average Vote:    No vote yet. Bytes: 481

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the torrent of blood rushes to where it ought not to be      and i have gazed and gasped and made a decision      and fear and freedom. somewhere near, also.            the snow white steep drop of outside my body

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