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    dots Submission Name: Magic Mandots
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    Author: Carosuel
    ASL Info:    26/F/Twirlwind
    Elite Ratio:    4.93 - 96/73/28
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 498
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    Description:
       The second part of my duet. The part where I choose to stay and love.


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    dotsMagic Mandots
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    Your heart has grafted over mine,
    So I can feel it beat,
    and bleed,
    and break
    within my chest.

    If I could sketch our world,
    it would be in disarray.
    How ordinary,
    how boring,
    must it be to ink it in.

    And you, you, you, you,
    inescapable you,
    with your aura,
    and your candles,
    and your trunk,
    you are magic.

    How we became one
    escapes me every time
    I deign to think on it.

    but so, bit by bit,
    your touch is mine,
    your laugh is mine,
    your heart.

    It beats within me.




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      Haunting and sweet....like you, Precious One.
    | Posted on 2017-04-28 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]


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