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    dots Submission Name: Brr.dots
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    Author: Outlaw
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 510/413/195
    Words: 212
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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       Brr under certain classifications is considered to be a word in scrabble. So are Brrr, and Brrrr.


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    J'y suis, et pourtant, on ne s'en rend pas compte
    "I am here, et yet, nobody seems to realize"

    Petulant red rose petals flitting but for a gentle breeze
    perched upon their arches, yearning examples
    of blossom in otherwise destitute exile
    gone from ember kissed hues to ashen white.

    There is a gaunt embrace in a wind bearing chill,
    rending skin, flaying away the very fibers of sensation;
    there is peace on unproductive plains, flakes of a spiritual
    life with no god, only echoing screams of pain and cries
    scattering what may still hang from pronged sprigs.

    Le Canada n'est que quelques arpents de neige
    "Canada is no more than a few snowy acres"

    There is a vast quality to this emptiness, it overwhelms;
    like the sun to an eye during an eclipse, a life overshadowed
    by meaningless struggles and discomfort. It is romantic,
    and yet only tragically sought out -- the disparate solace
    of artistic insanity. The figment of a world in which there
    can be no concept of other, of you, of bearing witness
    to a self, no discovery.

    If passion is born from fire, this is a land of disciplined
    purposelessness, a wandering sea otter whose only friend
    is a chipped pebble.




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      Wow, you are a really good writer. The entire piece is well done, but the end really hits home, very unique and soulful and picturesque. And in some funny way, I think it personalizes how Alone feels, because I think everyone feels like that otter in some way.
    | Posted on 2017-04-06 00:00:00 | by WriteSomething | [ Reply to This ]
      Some very melancholy stuff Mark. So many excellent metaphors. I especially like the last one "a wandering sea otter whose only friend is a chipped pebble." Gives me visions of a man with naught to treasure but our root clod of a planet. Everything else is meaningless, unproductive, and destitute. I wonder if this reflects your own personal struggles and joys. I get the feeling that often enough you actually feel this way about existence. Artistically stated my friend.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2017-03-03 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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