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    dots Submission Name: Glass Fishdots
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    Author: WriteSomething
    Elite Ratio:    1.14 - 7/3/4
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsGlass Fishdots
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    The loss of you was cliché,
    Something that happens daily
    to Other People
    so writing about it
    would be redundant;
    Thousands of Me's
    have described their You's
    clearer than I ever could.
    I see you sometimes
    in their windows of words
    and it makes me feel
    transparent
    and makes the broken Us
    feel like less.

    My solitude is a bowl of water
    Motionless, fragility hanging
    on a single breath
    and all the eyes watching
    are magnified
    by the curvature of curiosity.

    Sometimes I feel unfinished,
    but perhaps my outlines
    were never meant to be colored in.
















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      Sometimes I feel unfinished,
    but perhaps my outlines
    were never meant to be colored in.

    This is a very powerful line and my favorite part of this piece. I can feel the longing and the perception of feeling like someone else defines you. Good job!
    | Posted on 2017-03-27 00:00:00 | by Poetic_tragedy6 | [ Reply to This ]
      There are days when every "me"
    is magnified by every "you"
    to commonly shared endless degrees
    yet it never warps the truth

    only scribbles on the page
    are cheapened by the sentiments
    of those who feel they own all pain
    and have amassed a testament

    Just my thoughts on yours.
    | Posted on 2017-03-15 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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