I had a very long comment that I wrote last night. Somehow it didn't post. Ehhh. So, paraphrasing will have to do. Your words do not match the emotion of the song. It's very yin and yang. Repetitive for sure with the same video three times. Is that a say it three times or post it three times because you mean it kinda thinking? I liked the beginning. How you pulled the reader in with how you walk around in company and alone. It's very hook, line, and sinker. I hated the second strophe. Truly. To confess a maligned spirit is such, oh I don't know, awful. It's the poo emoji. It's the frown face poo emoji. It's bitter tasting and leaves a shit face on the reader. Not to insult. Of course to provoke emotion shows the true talent of a writer. I am always that movie goer who hates the bad guy to my core through out the movie and then giving compliments to the writer for creating such trash! (I know.) So even though I hated it, who's to say it's awful. I know that poetry is either abstract or very real. I thought you did a great job making this feel very real. I even wanted to avoid commenting because I didn't want to be that person to say hey 'is everything okay?' But, you know what, fuck that. Poetry is meant to be a catharsis process and this is a great example. I hope that you have gotten all that darkness out of your system and not holding it inside of you. If in fact, if these words were genuinely what I just described, I wish you some joy and connection. The best part of your poem was when you expressed your heart as being a seed in which everything would grow from. That was beautiful . Sincere. Honest. Real. Identifiable. The last line was again awful. So this was a rollercoaster of emotion that I felt just as many ups as downs. What a journey you have provided with this write. I hope that, for your sake, you will never want to smother your inner child or that you may never want to smother a child. Both are awful. Again, I offer nothing to aid in making this better. I did however think of a song that your write reminded me of. Maybe you might agree. Maybe not, either way I hope that you continue to write as you are very talented.