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    dots Submission Name: Sundaysdots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    26/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 136/243/156
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSundaysdots
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    We’ve reached our point of saturation
    on this particular rooftop, breeze
    billowing the fake
    silk curtains.
    Let me lightly touch your forearm
    another desperate attempt
    to catch your
    breath

    this drunken gaze through the sunglasses
    my white dress in the wind
    and your hot arm
    on shoulders

    there’d be a thin film of perspiration
    shortly, blended with
    alcohol and
    perfume

    oh let me -- wipe it away,
    your troubled brow,
    the screwed up mouth,
    I know, can produce
    such lovely sounds

    the sky burnt into my iris
    aren’t you wearing lenses, then? –
    they’d ask – the turquoise of my eyes

    gaze into them, unabashed, swim
    and emerge --
    quite forgiven
    on the other side.




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