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Author: expiring_touch
ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
Elite Ratio:    3.93 - 139 /258 /171
Words: 85
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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look how your name made me
dream – of mirrored courtyards
and paper cut feet –
this city spread
on seven hills, and midnight
flowers open up their lips,
breath sweetly in your face
air, hovering
above the dazed commuters.

and who am I to claim innocence
standing on poorly tarmacked road
and hands smelling of fish and cheap
alcohol, wondering
how the moon, heavy-lidded and pregnant,
would sit on your side of the bed
trying to gulp down nausea?

Submitted on 2017-03-23 13:55:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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