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    dots Submission Name: Tributedots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 139/254/170
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsTributedots
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    look how your name made me
    dream – of mirrored courtyards
    and paper cut feet –
    this city spread
    on seven hills, and midnight
    flowers open up their lips,
    breath sweetly in your face
    air, hovering
    above the dazed commuters.

    and who am I to claim innocence
    standing on poorly tarmacked road
    and hands smelling of fish and cheap
    alcohol, wondering
    how the moon, heavy-lidded and pregnant,
    would sit on your side of the bed
    trying to gulp down nausea?




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      Thought provoking images.

    Lloyd
    | Posted on 2017-04-27 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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